Response Grades

What do fantastic/great/good/mediocre responses look like?

4 (A):

100%
"Lily Melissa Owens, your jar is open." That voice gave her the courage to run away.  he had been thinking about it, but never had the guts to
do it. That one little voice gave her the push, to get out of her crazy
life.
---> Before she left her house she wrote a note to T.Ray. It stated not
to find her and that people like him should "rot in hell". She grabbed
her duffel filled it with clothes, and grabbed her mother's gloves and
black Mary. She decided she was going to make her way to Tiburon
because she thought someone had to have known her mother if she was
there because the inscription on the back of the photo said "Tiburon,
S.C.". Then she went and found Rosaleen. Rosaleen was in the hospital
getting stitches; there was a guard blocking her door, so no one could
see her. Lily made a clever plan, and called the hospital pretend there
was an emergency, and the officer had to go down to the station right
away. Then she fooled the nurse at the hospital by calling her
a "shitbucket" and ran into another room. She waited for the nurse to
leave the desk, and then the two of them bolted out the door.
---> They made their way down to Highway 40 and tried to hitch hike. A
colored man going to visit his sister in Columbia, (3 miles away from
Tiburon) took them. They got to a sign that said "Tiburon 3 miles" and
the man let them out. They walked awhile and made it to a bridge. They
decided to stay there and sleep by the creek; they would finish their
way to Tiburon the next day.

4--(A) 95%

June Boatwright has been cruel to Lily and Rosaleen ever since they arrived at the home of the “Calendar Sisters”. She refused to let them stay there, and if it wasn’t for August to come along, they probably would have been living in the streets now or still just wandering around Tiburon, South Carolina, looking for a home that consisted of people who would actually greet them in with open arms. “But she’s white, August.” (pg. 87) June said this while talking to her sister, trying to convince her that Lily and Rosaleen should be forcibly removed from their home. Being hated by June so much really confused Lily; she would wonder why a black person would hate a white one. Usually, back then, it was black people that were mistreated, but when someone non-black (like Lily) is treated the same way, it doesn’t make her feel exactly jubilant on the inside.

In addition, what also confused Lily is that if June does not like white people, then how come she wouldn’t let in Rosaleen, who is black? Even though whites and blacks are all EQUAL, June obviously doesn’t feel that way. But then, don’t you think that she should have at least let Rosaleen stay there? It is all completely wrong, and I think that there is a stronger reason behind why June doesn’t like them. Now, I just want to find out.

 

3 (B), 85%:

Being discriminated against is a very strange concept for her because she is white. She is surprised because she always thought that racism was a one way street, that whites treat blacks differently, not the other way around. Lily is used to being held as a normal person, at least when it comse to the color of her skin, but now she is being discriminated against for it. But yet, Lily is surprised of the hipocricy that they are mad about normally being discriminated against, yet now they are doing it to lily. "I wanted to march up there, flip a couple of tables over, and say, Excuse me, June Boatwright, but you dont even know me!" (87) She is also shocked to hear, that the sisters dont believe her story. THey saw right through her lies. "There's no aunt and you know it," (87) Lily thought that she had fooled the sisters into believeing her false story but she didnt fool them.

2 (C), 75% :

"But she's white, August."(pg 87) Lily "Williams" finds this so unusual because she not used have people not like her because she is white. Lily is so accustomed to having people look at Rosaleen weird not Lily. Lily is also so confused why June doesn't like her because she thinks that June has no reason to dislike her. Also she probably thinks that everyone should be nice to her just like she expected Rosaleen to apologize to the three white men.

1 (D), 65% :

The unusual-nest in this situation is that she a little girl. Lily is surprised when the think someones after her. Rosaleen with her made her even more suspicious.